Lance Nes

can someone edit this french paragraph?

i have to write a paragraph about my favourite band in my french class and i wrote it but im pretty sure a lot of it doesnt make any sense so i need someone who knows french to edit it for me and if you can add some sentences that make sense but dont forget that this is a presentation so im talking to a class. thanks..here it goes:

Mon groupe préféré s'appelle Linkin Park. Ils jouent de la musique rock. Les membres du groupe sont tous nés en Ontario. Leur prochaine tournée s'appellera "Projeckt Revolution" et aura lieu en 2008. Ils ont gagné six Grammy Awards dont celui du meilleur groupe de l'année. La chanson que j'aime le plus d'eux est "In the End". Dans ce groupe, Rob est le batteur, Brad est le guitariste et Mike est le chanteur.

Hi! I'm a native french speaker, and I've edited your text so now it makes sense lol (at some places I've completely change the sentences but don't worry, now it sounds way better) Hope I've helped you and good luck for your presentation! ^^

Advanced Dungeons Dragons Heroes of the Lance Nintendo NES LOW PRICE $7.21 Time Remaining: 1d 1h 49m Buy It Now for only: $7.21

HEROES OF THE LANCE Original Nintendo NES Game $6.87 Time Remaining: 2d 19h 46m Buy It Now for only: $6.87

Advanced Dungeons Dragons Heroes of the Lance Original Nintendo NES Game ADD $12.30 Time Remaining: 4d 35m Buy It Now for only: $12.30

HEROES OF THE LANCE ORIGINAL COMPLETE NINTENDO NES 708 1000 $22.99 Time Remaining: 4d 49m Buy It Now for only: $22.99

ADD HEROES OF THE LANCE NES Nintendo Game $6.06 Time Remaining: 5d 34m Buy It Now for only: $6.06

Nintendo NES Game Dungeons Dragons HEROES OF THE LANCE Boxed COMPLETE CIB $21.40 Time Remaining: 7d 20h 54m Buy It Now for only: $21.40

Advanced Dungeons Dragons Heroes of the Lance Nintendo RARE NES GAME $14.99 Time Remaining: 7d 21h 47m Buy It Now for only: $14.99

Tested Working NES Nintendo Game HEROES OF THE LANCE $6.17 Time Remaining: 8d 23h 48m Buy It Now for only: $6.17

HEROES OF THE LANCE RPG GAME FOR NES GAME SYSTEM $10.00 Time Remaining: 11d 3h 59m Buy It Now for only: $10.00

NES Nintendo Advanced DD Heroes of the Lance RPG 1991 $20.00 Time Remaining: 14d 1h 9m Buy It Now for only: $20.00

A D D Heroes of the Lance Nintendo NES FREE SHIPPING $9.47 Time Remaining: 14d 3h 28m Buy It Now for only: $9.47

Heroes of the Lance manual only Nintendo NES Advanced Dungeons Dragons ADD $2.75 Time Remaining: 17d 3h 46m Buy It Now for only: $2.75

Advance Dungeons and Dragons Heroes of The Lance NES Original Nintendo Game ADD $11.35 Time Remaining: 24d 5h 14m Buy It Now for only: $11.35

Advanced Dungeons Dragons Heroes of the Lance Complete NES Nintendo 1991 $24.97 Time Remaining: 25d 3h 11m Buy It Now for only: $24.97

NES ADVANCED DUNGEONS DRAGONS HEROES OF THE LANCE GAME VERY FUN $6.99 Time Remaining: 30d Buy It Now for only: $6.99